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[Marc Stewart <marc.c.stewart@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx>]

** Description changed:

  Rev. 788
  Ch. 3, § "Getting online", p. 41 (PDF p. 43)
  Type: grammar
  
  Manual has:
  In order to connect to wireless connection, you must have a working wireless network.
  
  Ignoring the lack of article (a wireless connection) or plural (wireless connections), this is incorrect as "wireless connection" is being used to describe a wireless network, which makes the sentence a statement of the obvious:
  In order to connect to a wireless network, you must have a working wireless network.
  
  Suggestion, incorporating rewrites of following sentences:
- In order to connect wirelessly, you must be in a location with a working wireless network. To create your own, you will need to buy and install a wireless router or access point, although some locations already have a publicly-accessible wireless network established.
+ In order to connect wirelessly, you must be in a location with a working wireless network. To create your own, you will need to buy and install a wireless router or access point, but some locations already have a publicly accessible wireless network established.

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"Wireless connection" inappropriately used on p.41
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Bug description:
Rev. 788
Ch. 3, § "Getting online", p. 41 (PDF p. 43)
Type: grammar

Manual has:
In order to connect to wireless connection, you must have a working wireless network.

Ignoring the lack of article (a wireless connection) or plural (wireless connections), this is incorrect as "wireless connection" is being used to describe a wireless network, which makes the sentence a statement of the obvious:
In order to connect to a wireless network, you must have a working wireless network.

Suggestion, incorporating rewrites of following sentences:
In order to connect wirelessly, you must be in a location with a working wireless network. To create your own, you will need to buy and install a wireless router or access point, but some locations already have a publicly accessible wireless network established.