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Message #00308
[Bug 585397] Re: Comma splice on p.34 & Suggestions for rewrite
I've fixed this in the second edition. Thanks!
** Changed in: ubuntu-manual
Status: In Progress => Fix Committed
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Comma splice on p.34 & Suggestions for rewrite
https://bugs.launchpad.net/bugs/585397
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Status in Ubuntu Manual: Fix Committed
Bug description:
Rev. 788
Ch. 2, § "Theme", p. 34 (PDF p.36)
Types: grammar, suggestions
Manual has:
The theme called “Ambiance” is enabled by default, however, you will see there are seven other default themes to choose from in the list.
There is a comma splice before "however" here.
"Enabled" has the wrong connotation. "Used" is more appropriate.
"In the list" would probably be better earlier in the sentence, if used at all.
Suggestion:
The "Ambiance" theme is used by default, but there are seven other themes you can choose from. Just click once on the theme you want to try, and the changes will take effect immediately.
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