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[Wendy Sheridan <wendy@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx>]

Hi,
I attached a truncated PDF (of mostly just the prolog - the Acrobat delete
pages function is acting strange with this file - something to do with the
Roman numerals and my counting skills apparently) with comments and
editorial suggestions for the prolog. I also fixed a lot of punctuation
errors (proper use of apostrophes go a long way towards meeting the
"professional" goal).

My edits were mostly to change some word choices to American English (which
is what I know) - if those are not where you want to go, that's fine. I also
deleted things that looked like slang and tried to tighten up the language a
bit.

The section "Is Ubuntu Right For You?" I think has some serious tone issues
- all it tells me is that it's not going to run any of the software that I
am used to and know and it seems to be actively dissuading me from wanting
to use it (trying to put my "target market" hat on for a moment). I would
strongly suggest shortening the negative bullet paragraphs, and don't snark
at people who (like me!) *like* Adobe software (and have invested quite a
bit of money in it in order to, for example, WORK to feed their family). For
EVERY negative, IMMEDIATELY follow it with a solution/positive.

Something like:

* You probably aren't going to be able to call on your local computer store
for help if you experience a problem. Luckily, because Ubuntu is
community-based, open source software, the Ubuntu community is available
on-line 24/7 and you will be able to find help and support from them (etc or
something like this)

* Ubuntu doesn't run most (or all?) Windows-based commercial software.
However, the open-source community has created software that performs all
the common tasks and functions that you typically use (and list them, with
links to more info or downloads or whatever).

* Ubuntu is also not a supported OS for many popular, commercially produced
games (yet). However,  blah blah blah.

And then you should list some more benefits for using Ubuntu.

I have to get to some other things today so I can't do more right now. I
hope I haven't ruffled any feathers. I also know I'm probably not following
the right processes for this yet. Please bear with me as I figure out this
whole system.

Best,
Wendy

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