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[Little Girl <littlergirl@xxxxxxxxx>]

An additional version to consider:

Adding accounts brings your choice of services, like calendar, chat, and
e-mail, straight to your desktop. It also makes their information a
seamless part of your user experience. By adding accounts, you can
easily keep in touch with different services, like chats, at the same
time. Just set your accounts once, and every time you start your
computer all your services are ready for you.

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Title:
  accounts-whyadd.page grammar fixes

Status in “ubuntu-docs” package in Ubuntu:
  In Progress

Bug description:
  GIVEN:
  Adding your accounts brings your choice of services like calendar, chat and e-mail straight to your desktop and makes the information of the services a seamless part of your user experience. By adding accounts you can easily keep in touch with services of different accounts, like chats, at the same time. Just set your account once and every time you start your computer all the accounts and services you've added are ready for you.

  I think it needs a lot more commas to facilitate reading.

  PROPOSED:
  Adding your accounts brings your choice of services like calendar, chat, and e-mail straight to your desktop.  It also makes the information of the services a seamless part of your user experience. By adding accounts, you can easily keep in touch with services of different accounts, like chats, at the same time. Just set your account once, and every time you start your computer, all the accounts and services you've added are ready for you.

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