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[John Kim <johnkim.ubuntu@xxxxxxxxx>]

Public bug reported:

GIVEN:
Adding your accounts brings your choice of services like calendar, chat and e-mail straight to your desktop and makes the information of the services a seamless part of your user experience. By adding accounts you can easily keep in touch with services of different accounts, like chats, at the same time. Just set your account once and every time you start your computer all the accounts and services you've added are ready for you.

I think it needs a lot more commas to facilitate reading.

PROPOSED:
Adding your accounts brings your choice of services like calendar, chat, and e-mail straight to your desktop.  It also makes the information of the services a seamless part of your user experience. By adding accounts, you can easily keep in touch with services of different accounts, like chats, at the same time. Just set your account once, and every time you start your computer, all the accounts and services you've added are ready for you.

** Affects: ubuntu-docs (Ubuntu)
     Importance: Undecided
         Status: New


** Tags: bitesize saucy

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https://bugs.launchpad.net/bugs/1220983

Title:
  accounts-whyadd.page grammar fixes

Status in “ubuntu-docs” package in Ubuntu:
  New

Bug description:
  GIVEN:
  Adding your accounts brings your choice of services like calendar, chat and e-mail straight to your desktop and makes the information of the services a seamless part of your user experience. By adding accounts you can easily keep in touch with services of different accounts, like chats, at the same time. Just set your account once and every time you start your computer all the accounts and services you've added are ready for you.

  I think it needs a lot more commas to facilitate reading.

  PROPOSED:
  Adding your accounts brings your choice of services like calendar, chat, and e-mail straight to your desktop.  It also makes the information of the services a seamless part of your user experience. By adding accounts, you can easily keep in touch with services of different accounts, like chats, at the same time. Just set your account once, and every time you start your computer, all the accounts and services you've added are ready for you.

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