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[Marc Stewart <marc.c.stewart@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx>]

Public bug reported:

Rev. 788
Ch. 3, § "Other connection methods", p. 50
Type: style

Manual has:
Ubuntu can also connect using mobile broadband, VPNs, or DSLs, however, these methods are beyond the scope of this guide.

Ignoring the comma splice, this would be fine if mobile broadband, VPNs,
and DSL hadn't just been mentioned, making "also" inappropriate:

Suggestion:
The details of making connections using mobile broadband, VPNs, or DSLs, however, are beyond the scope of this guide.

** Affects: ubuntu-manual
     Importance: Undecided
         Status: New

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Ubuntu can also connect p.50
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Status in Ubuntu Manual: New

Bug description:
Rev. 788
Ch. 3, § "Other connection methods", p. 50
Type: style

Manual has:
Ubuntu can also connect using mobile broadband, VPNs, or DSLs, however, these methods are beyond the scope of this guide.

Ignoring the comma splice, this would be fine if mobile broadband, VPNs, and DSL hadn't just been mentioned, making "also" inappropriate:

Suggestion:
The details of making connections using mobile broadband, VPNs, or DSLs, however, are beyond the scope of this guide.