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[Roger Erens <roger.erens@xxxxxxxxx>]

On Fri, Jul 16, 2010 at 18:49, Tim Cook <timothywayne.cook@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:
> Hi All,

...
>
> You can see from the MLHIM umbrella project page
> https://launchpad.net/mlhim all of the sub-projects.
>

Good work!

> Thanks for your time.
>
> Regards,
> Tim

Clicking my way to the mlhim.org home page I have some suggestions for
the introductory text.

1)
In the first paragraph you place multi-level information models
against commonly used data models.
Why not just information models against data models?
If you still choose to contrast multi-level information models against
data models (which I bet you will), which levels of information
modelling do we use?
In short: I miss the definition of Multi-Level Health Information Modelling

2)
The fourth paragraph jumps to 'these specifications'.
Which specifications? What gets specified?

3)
The fifth paragraph is one extremely long sentence in which I lose
trail. (Also note the Launcpad typo).

If you'd use some more (sub-)headings, dots or other styles, the start
page could really be  viewed in Plone's Presentation Mode.

Cheers,

Roger