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[Tim Cook <timothywayne.cook@xxxxxxxxx>]

Hi Roger,

Thanks for your suggestions.  Please feel free to edit the text.  It
should be clear to everyone that visits.  Since it came from my head.
It means that I do not have the perspective that someone reading it for
the first time will have.  

In fact I hope that others will send suggestions as well in order to
make the text easily understandable.  The branding is in the graphics.
It doesn't have to be in the text at all.  

One suggestion was made to be that we should define "who we are" not
"who we are not".  I think that was a good suggestion as well.  Though
it may take more text, it'll be a better description.

Cheers,
Tim


On Sat, 2010-07-17 at 12:04 +0200, Roger Erens wrote:
> On Fri, Jul 16, 2010 at 18:49, Tim Cook <timothywayne.cook@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:
> > Hi All,
> 
> ...
> >
> > You can see from the MLHIM umbrella project page
> > https://launchpad.net/mlhim all of the sub-projects.
> >
> 
> Good work!
> 
> > Thanks for your time.
> >
> > Regards,
> > Tim
> 
> Clicking my way to the mlhim.org home page I have some suggestions for
> the introductory text.
> 
> 1)
> In the first paragraph you place multi-level information models
> against commonly used data models.
> Why not just information models against data models?
> If you still choose to contrast multi-level information models against
> data models (which I bet you will), which levels of information
> modelling do we use?
> In short: I miss the definition of Multi-Level Health Information Modelling
> 
> 2)
> The fourth paragraph jumps to 'these specifications'.
> Which specifications? What gets specified?
> 
> 3)
> The fifth paragraph is one extremely long sentence in which I lose
> trail. (Also note the Launcpad typo).
> 
> If you'd use some more (sub-)headings, dots or other styles, the start
> page could really be  viewed in Plone's Presentation Mode.
> 
> Cheers,
> 
> Roger

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