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[Roger Erens <roger.erens@xxxxxxxxx>]

on 17-07-10 14:23 Tim Cook wrote:
> Hi Roger,
>
> Thanks for your suggestions.  Please feel free to edit the text.  It
> should be clear to everyone that visits.  Since it came from my head.
> It means that I do not have the perspective that someone reading it for
> the first time will have.  
>   
Hi Tim,

I only feel free to edit the text wrt my 2nd suggestion and beyond. I
honestly don't know the answers to the questions I raised in the first
one (I guess that's why I shied away when you started MLHIM last year).

> In fact I hope that others will send suggestions as well in order to
> make the text easily understandable.  The branding is in the graphics.
> It doesn't have to be in the text at all.  
>
> One suggestion was made to be that we should define "who we are" not
> "who we are not".  I think that was a good suggestion as well.  Though
> it may take more text, it'll be a better description.
>
> Cheers,
> Tim
>
>
> On Sat, 2010-07-17 at 12:04 +0200, Roger Erens wrote:
>   
>> On Fri, Jul 16, 2010 at 18:49, Tim Cook <timothywayne.cook@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:
>>     
>>> Hi All,
>>>       
>> ...
>>     
>>> You can see from the MLHIM umbrella project page
>>> https://launchpad.net/mlhim all of the sub-projects.
>>>
>>>       
>> Good work!
>>
>>     
>>> Thanks for your time.
>>>
>>> Regards,
>>> Tim
>>>       
>> Clicking my way to the mlhim.org home page I have some suggestions for
>> the introductory text.
>>
>> 1)
>> In the first paragraph you place multi-level information models
>> against commonly used data models.
>> Why not just information models against data models?
>> If you still choose to contrast multi-level information models against
>> data models (which I bet you will), which levels of information
>> modelling do we use?
>> In short: I miss the definition of Multi-Level Health Information Modelling
>>
>> 2)
>> The fourth paragraph jumps to 'these specifications'.
>> Which specifications? What gets specified?
>>
>> 3)
>> The fifth paragraph is one extremely long sentence in which I lose
>> trail. (Also note the Launcpad typo).
>>
>> If you'd use some more (sub-)headings, dots or other styles, the start
>> page could really be  viewed in Plone's Presentation Mode.
>>
>> Cheers,
>>
>> Roger
>>     
>

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